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:iconcrissfrgger13:
This poem is defiantly very deep. Of course, I feel that way mostly because I can relate to it very closely.
Overall, it is written well. The repetition of the most important line can have a huge effect on a poem, as it did with this one, letting the reader know what the speaker is feeling. Also, the slight change in the very last line has a large effect for the reader, making them come to a quick conclusion and revealing what it was trying to convey.
One thing that I would say to improve on future writing is to proofread or if you do already, let someone else take a look over your work because there were a few inconsequential things that could be avoided (like the use of ever instead of every).
Once again, I'll say this poem is well written and keep up the good work!
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:iconmrsmiroku:
Thank you so much for this critique. It means a lot to me, and thanks for the advice. I will apply it in the future.

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